English version of the tool leaflet to comment on

Heiki "Repentinus" Ojasild repentinus at fsfe.org
Fri Nov 1 12:47:21 UTC 2013

On 01/11/13 11:04, Jann Eike Kruse wrote:
>   "[...] Free Software is not about price, but liberty."
> I suggest:
>   "[...] Free Software is not about price, it's about liberty."
>   "[...] Free Software is not about cost, it's about your freedom."

The original sentence is perfectly fine. Furthermore, comma splices are
ungrammatical in English.

>   "Whoever controls the software therefore controls you."
> I suggest:
>   "So whoever controls the software also controls you."

No preference here.

>   "Sometimes it 'only' does not do exactly what you expected,
>    but there are also programs and apps that contain malicious
>   'features' like leaking your data without your knowledge."
> I suggest:
>   "Some programs and apps might not do exactly what you expect.
>    Others may contain malicious 'features' and abuse your
>    data or your device for their own purpose behind your back."

I am not sure that the proposed replacement is good enough; however,
neither is the original. My proposal:

"The shortcomings of non-free software are sometimes limited to failing
to meet your expectations; however, more often than not non-free
software also leaks your data or hides other malicious 'features'."

> Maybe use italics instead of '....' quotes?


Heiki "Repentinus" Ojasild
FSFE Fellowship Representative
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